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Priya Nanduri · What Our Courtyard Survey Can Tell Us

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Most students at our school prefer the courtyard. It got 54 votes, so the school should put more tables there. The library had 38 and the student center had 20. Eight people picked other places. The courtyard must be popular because people like being outside. This survey gives the council a clear answer about what students want.

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The courtyard was the most common choice among the 120 students who answered the survey. It received 54 responses, compared with 38 for the library, 20 for the student center, and 8 for other places. That is 45%, so it is the largest group but not a majority. The courtyard ranked first among respondents. (Harbor Point Student Spaces Survey, 2026). This pattern could help the council decide where to ask more questions. It does not tell us why people went there: the question asked for a place, not a reason. The sampling method was not recorded. A bigger survey would make the result representative of everyone, so the council should collect more responses before buying tables.

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You have the counts in view. Check whether 54 of 120 means most students or the largest group. Then separate what the survey measured from your explanation of why people chose the courtyard. What would you need to know before speaking for the whole school?

Most students at our school prefer the courtyard.

Does 54 out of 120 show a majority? And did the question ask what students prefer?

This survey gives the council a clear answer about what students want.

What do you need to know about who answered before extending this to the school?

Student marked addressed · September 10, 2026 at 10:58 AM

You asked for another revision · September 11, 2026 at 8:30 AM

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Illustrative AI observations · Your judgment decides what is addressed

  • Priya now calculates 54 out of 120 as 45% and distinguishes the largest group from a majority.
  • She separates the reported location from an unsupported explanation of why students went there.
  • The last paragraph still says a larger survey guarantees representation. Your sampling comment needs another look.

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